-- Elements 1.01: "In Your Honor" --
Alright, a few days ago, September 14th to be exact, I found a nifty little pitch. Its called "Elements", a new virtual series created by Ian Austin. I liked the idea, and the cast is awesome.
Elements is pretty dark & brutal. But at times it throws you a little humor, and the humor is funny & not corny.
Reading the first draft, I noticed that the Teaser is a bit long..7 pages. Normally, teasers are to be 3 - 5 pages. But really its no big deal.
As most first drafts, there are spelling mistakes. Such as:
pg. 53 " undesireable" should be spelled "undesirable", "In Your Honor" is spelled "In Your Honour", "Realise" should be "Realize", "useable" should be "usable", etc..
This pilot does, what every pilot should do. Introduce the characters and whats going to happen to them. This is what it does, and does it good.
I would give a longer review, but really, the spelling mistakes are the only real thing thats wrong, hopefully a second episode will be available to read. The ending is great and made me interested for a second episode, hopefully this gets picked up.
Rating:
9/10